Broken

by Hopeless Romantic   Aug 6, 2005


You told me that you loved me.
you said you'd never leave me.
but now you're here no more.
I cant smile like i could before.

my days are no longer complete.
my heart has ceased to beat.
you made me smile when others couldn't.
you held me close when others wouldn't.

now you're no longer around.
true love I thought I had found.
I loved you with all I had.
for our time together I'm truly glad.

now its time that I let go.
whats next for me? I do not know.
another risk I cannot take.
theres nothing left, of my heart to break.

I hope for you things are well.
of our love I will always tell,
all about the good times,
and never about the sad.

now I have to go.
I have broken the rhyme i started.
a broken rhyme
that leaves me broken-hearted.

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  • 17 years ago

    by K3LSI3

    That was such a great poem.The flow was good.
    Keep up the good work.5/5

    Kelsie

  • 18 years ago

    by BeautifulxMess

    That was soo beautiful! Lovely write. Your words were expressed so well, and the flow was nice. 5/5
    Keep up the great work!

    ~*Tay*~

  • 18 years ago

    by Kayla

    Very nicely done. A hopeless romantic huh? Give it time, things will work out I'm sure. Thanks for the comment on my poem. Hope all is well and take care

    -kayla-

  • 18 years ago

    by Truest Lies

    I noticed that in really dark, depressive poems all the I's were written as i's.
    I can just hope that this poem of yours is not unsubtly saying that you have depression, and please do not develop it.
    Even if you have lost a loved one, and this poems seems to say so.
    I've heard that "there are more fish in the sea" and although that is one of the cruelest things you can say to a broken heart, the truth is cruel. So mourn her as you may, and then move in.

    I don't know if this poem is real, if it actually happened, so I cannot say if I am talking realisticaly or metaphoricaly.

    //Truest Lies//

  • 18 years ago

    by Jerry Scott

    Although it may not matter depending on your intent, the last few lines lack rhyme. But I think if you modified those lines it'd be even better. Overall it's well thought out and written. I give you 5.

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