by Kayla
aww very cute...the last stanza is a little rough but besides that awesome job!!! keep it up...luv yas mwah |
very clever how you wrote this. i especially enjoyed the ending.. it was different.. piece of art. loved it |
by Jerry Scott
Although it may not matter depending on your intent, the last few lines lack rhyme. But I think if you modified those lines it'd be even better. Overall it's well thought out and written. I give you 5. |
by Truest Lies
I noticed that in really dark, depressive poems all the I's were written as i's. |
by Kayla
Very nicely done. A hopeless romantic huh? Give it time, things will work out I'm sure. Thanks for the comment on my poem. Hope all is well and take care |
That was soo beautiful! Lovely write. Your words were expressed so well, and the flow was nice. 5/5 |
by K3LSI3
That was such a great poem.The flow was good. |