by Lenny Aug 8, 2005
category :
Nature, environment /
nature
A drip in a spiders web, |
by Drew Gold
Im not really good with haiku's, but your imagery is so in tune with nature, i love it.. i gather from this that it's from the eyes of an insect being spun in a spiders web.. these are really weird to critique,.. the syllable count seems to be a bit off. if i remember correctly, it should be.. 5-7-5 respectively.. though, ive read a lot of poems from a man who lived in japan for an amount of time, and his haiku's didnt always follow this pattern, so i guess you're fine with this.. |
You're really good at this, I like these a lot |