Great poem, but perhaps devide it in to more lines, where all the -> , . ! <- etc are you should break to a new line, makes it better.. I think anyways, but we all have different styles:)

Best wishes,
Patrik

awww. that was nice.. it was v deep.. nice end..
keep it up
nouna

Very deep, with a realisticaly sad edge to it. Perhaps you should call it Insignificant.

Good Writing!
beth