Good poem... not ur best but still good!

I think this poem has great potensial,, just think about it more, and choise ur words better so that they rhime better, but i give it a 4/5,, u can read my poems, and tell me what u think,, tnx* lots lof love,, doz an1c me?

Honestly, I don't like it. 'Anyways' is not exactly a poetic word, its slang and 'fait' has no definiation other than being a surname so i prosume you meant 'fate'. You had some good ideas that you could definatly build off another time but try introducing metaphors, similies and the like into your work, experiment with your words.

Will I like it on matter how it is written, it was from your heart, xoxox Rach