I don't quite see what you are trying to say...maybe if you expand...

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I think i understand the point of the poem that you are a mother trying to understand a cry and you find out in the end that it was your son all along. a couple of times the flow didn't go so smooth and it could have been a little better in those areas. the other two i've read from you were better i would have to say. but keep up the good work.

~Jacklyn