Comments : Little Purple Flower

  • 19 years ago

    by Sean Allen

    "you represent so much to me,
    stong, dependent, never faltering,"
    -stong should be "strong"
    -when u said dependent i think you meant independent

    "and will sometimes give you a wart,
    for takeing it from its home."
    -takeing should be spelled "taking"

    this was a pretty good poem. in a way, it is sort of hitting the reader over the head with its symbolism, but not all meaning has to be hidden deeply i guess. I'd work on making it so that if you have stanzas that are mostly 4 lines, all of them should have 4 lines. If you're writing a poem that doesn't rhyme, try to make it so that it doesn't rhyme most of the time.