ok..i like it a lot... except for a few errors like: Saying, “Have you’re took your pill?” >>have you taken your pill...
and if i can ask..its a mixed message no?? please try and explain becaus ei love, but i'd love it more if i understood completely.
take care and please get back to me!! x x x

I loved it..the message was kinda mixed but still very good..thanks for commenting on my poem it really means alot...Love Joclyn

Your poems are really good hey :]
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ilike this one heaps