WOW.. this is soo good.. totoallli AWESOME!!.. great job..

if u can check out some of my poems..
-destroyed by fame
-sweetest pain

Good poem, but really really tough to read because it's not devided up in paragraphs, that's probably the reason it's been rated so low.

best wishes,
Patrik

same advice as last time and i aslo think stanzas would be good..

its a good poem jusst needs a lil help :)