by Red Tears Of The Soul Aug 12, 2005
category :
Love, romance /
new love
The beach, the sand... |
by Ariana
Hehehe, this is funny. I'd suggest changing 'I want to really meet her' to 'I really want to meet her.' Its reads as a comical interpretation of love - I liked it :) |
by HansRik
Needless to say, you are very talented and you are truly a poetic girl. Although I agree with Jamie in that the powerful emotion felt at the beginning seemed to fade away. Nevertheless, an excellent piece. |
by Jamie
Hmmm i can't say i hate but it wasn't my favorite...it was funny i must say....but you started so strong and meaninful and then it went to funny which i thought was weird it left me just like what happened |
The shoes didnt come out the way they were on the screne |
I think your poem is great and im very sorry you didnt have shoes |