A really bad day

by Mark   Aug 13, 2005


You wake up early
Cant get back to sleep
You fall to the floor
In a reckless heap

As you make breakfast
The milk is what you spill
Feeling down is what
You cant help but feel

You go to work
The it starts to rain
Your boss moans at you for being late
As you fight to stay sane

As you start your shift
The minutes seem like hours
You feel entrapped
By twenty store towers

Lunch time arrives
You finally get a break
You buy a sandwich
And sit on a bench near the lake

Your bag at a distance
Someone sees a chance
The police is not an option
Of them you only got a glance

You finally get home
And fall to the ground once more
You cant believe that
You've made it through the door

How to explain what happened
Well its pretty easy to say
You have just experienced
A really bad day

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  • 19 years ago

    by ASPHYXIATED

    Wow, this is great!
    I can actually say I never read a poem like it :D
    One thing that would make the flow more great would be to change this line a little
    "And fall to the floor once more"
    The floor then more then door is to much oor lol, maybe try "And fall to the ground once more"

    Just a option your the poet its up to you :D

    great write :D

    xoOox

  • 19 years ago

    by Marjan

    Great poem. I loved it. you're really talented.
    wish you the best,
    marjan

  • 19 years ago

    by tea lady

    bravo gd poem lol

  • 19 years ago

    by inlove

    yer woah, its great ...!!!
    really good!!

    Love Sam xox

  • 19 years ago

    by CHOKE

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