wow i really loved the last bit!!
pure brillience!!(is that a word?)

great flow x)

OMG! this was totally rockin travis!
im so sorry that i havent commented in a while! i forgot....silly me!
i didnt forget u though lol!
as u can see!
newayz 5/5
<3 eLiZaBeTh

wow..this is soo good.. awesome job.. keep it up..

'You wanted to be with me
Me and no one else'
might wanna put a comma between those two me's...my pizzas ready! yay!
it was really good, (your poems, not the pizza!)the 'sentances' were well blended.

i like it. it's so full of emotion. it flowed really well although the rhymes seemed a little forced in the 3rd stanza:
What happened?
You no longer feel
Strong towards me
This broken seal
other than that i think it was really good
crystal

How sad....I love the simplicity. It flowed so well and was very easy to read. I love the title as well...I love that you approached the poem with a title not directly from the lines but still it directly connected with every stanza....Nicely done!!! :)

I really like the idea...But in some parts your thoughts seem unorganized, and some rymes seem a little forced.
these are the stanzas I think need a little work: 2,3,4....but all the other stanzas are great and I loved them. especially the last one.

This is just advice...you can choose to use or not use it lol.

flow was a bit off but great job..true emotion...keep it up...luv yas mwah

-kayla-

It was a little weak at first, but you finished strong - especially your last stanza "Blood to blood, tear to tear, life to life, love no longer near" Keep working on it and expand on the idea some more, and this will be a great poem.

XxX))Eclipse((XxX

The begining was a little rough, but the last few paragraphs were really good. keep up the good work!

Aww this is so amazing, I love it!!! A poem that many people can relate to, including me....very emotional and deep, you did a great job

thanks for all of your comments, I really appreciate it =0)

*Hugs sabrina*

I luv the last stanza

" blood to blood,
tear to tear,
life to life,
love no longer near"