by lostlllsoul
u express it so well |
by ღ*KiM*ღ
Nice write, the verse lines "it's my job. |
by Sean Allen
I made some changes, thanks for the recommendations. |
by ASPHYXIATED
Wow, this was a great idea. its very original and i liked where you said about the labels. |
by Sapphire
It was okay, ive read a lot of your other poems, this isnt one of your best though. There is a good flow to it I give you that. |
by zay
that good man |
by Lance Hardy
Awesome poem there Mr. Allen. Better keep up the good work or else someone may have to smite you...when he comes back =(. Keep it up, cya around. |
by Aken Sol
Yeh, i dig it. |
by Lyla
As you probablt know they are alot of cutting poems on this site but this one seems to be different from the rest. You did a good job of making a widely used topic unique. I may not have got some of it but that might be my own stupidity. Good job |
by SweetSuicide
Hey nice poem..very crative and alot of emotion.in it..great job..5/5.plz comment on any of my poems.. |
by Katlynn
You expressed yourself very well but to me i didn't really liked this one and didn't make any sense to me. I mean most of my poems don't make sense anyway so i shouldn't be talking but mm i personally didn't like this one that much. I mean good ideas and stuff. But you said you weren't depressed but if you weren't then you wouldn't have cut yourself so yeah. But anyway keep it up. keep on writing. love always and forever. |
I liked this poem...i liked how you said at the end the little note about trying to figure out what it's really about...i didnt like how i didnt rhyme very well thiough...and the flow wasnt so hott....but other then that it was really good...4/5 |
Very interesting.. it sound like someone breaking away from what society tells them they should be going. cutting away from the social cloth which is our lives. wonderful, about a person who isnt afraid to be different and stand up for their tommro. wonderful work I loved it ~5~ |
by HOLLY ARMER
This is a very intriguing and thought provoking piece. I really like the ending, overall it's brilliant! Keep it up~Holly |
Hmm. my brother once cut his nose with an exacto knife. accidentily. um, he was actually stabbing our couch. he was 2. nothing to do with the poem. this is just what I think of when I hear the words "exacto knife." |
by Darien
Lol, I figured this poem wasn't about cutting. It was really good though, I liked the 'hidden' message you were trying to send out to other people.. well at least what I got from it was 'labelling' haha. Good stuff |
by Natalie
Hm.. I don't really know what this is about. I know it doesn't sound like self infliction. But it was great that you made it like this. It really makes the reader think about it. Awesome job. And thanks for the honest comments, Very appreciated =] 5/5 |
by Megann Lee
I thought this poem was very, unique and creative. I loved the concept of it, and thought the rythym and flows was rather good. |
by C Cattaway
I think this would make a good song.. It has something about it.. I don't agree with some of the above comments.. it doesn't need to have any flow, as it already has it in its order. There is a poignancy about it, and it's so deep, that I can see how others can put the wrong connotations upon your words, however, it reads beautifully. Well done, this is 5/5 without a doubt. xx |
"no i'm not sad" is a weak line and seems forced and doesnt fit |