Your rhymes were good. It was kind of all over the place because there was no structured verse. It was still awesome though. I never really rate people a 4, unless I didn't like it. I believe leaving a comment on hwo to help is good enough. All poetry is good, in their own way. :D

some of it was hard for me to understand, but that's just me! it was good! 4/5

long poem but well worth reading to the bottom. Great poem full of talent. Keep writing....... well done :)