aww... that was so sweet.. i lykd it, especially coz f the rhyme..
keep goin
nouna

wow, that was really good! i definately enjoyed that it was worth the read, it has a different view of it and thats awesome, it was really great 5/5

That was a lovely poem. It was sad, but touching. Keep up the wonderful work.
><> Kiesha

i thought it was very good. it was short and simple yet still had a lot of emotion.

I love the imagery in this poem and the way it flows from one stanza to the next - it tells a story. It seems so sad on one hand, because he's leaving home, away from his parents... Then on the other hand, it's so happy and sweet that he's gone to find her. You're a master of the mixed emotion, in and out of the realm of poetry. Truly talented you are. Keep it up, hun. ^.^ <3

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Darien, beautiful as always, I hope you find in life, what you’re looking for and deserve! It’s a sad story, but sometimes it’s good to take the next step, to find out who you really are. I remember the day I left my family, I wasn’t sad though, I was relieved, and we fought all the time. I found what I thought to be love, but after 9 years of wasting my life, I figured out I was only trying to convince myself. I hope you have a great success in life and love! Best of luck to you! Take Care! Brooke~
I am so glad the red number are working again =)

WOW! I really loved this poem. It was short, sweet, and even a little sad. I loved it though. Beautifully wirttien!

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~*hAiLy*~

Wow this is kool. it's like this guy would do anything to find the right gilr even leave everything he's ever know that shows how much everone needs love keep up the good work 5/5 and thanks for the comment

This was a very beautiful poem :) I could just picture everything happening as i read it :) 5/5

Great poem, I really liek the idea you used. Keep writing and keep up the great work:)

Aw that was a sad but sweet love poem, you described the character really well, I loved the ending. Thanks for commenting on my poem :)

Loved this! How sweet to see a dreamer in this boy hoping for true love. :)

That's really cute, i like the detail and description, it really made it stick out a little more and add a another demension to it. great, 5/5

This was very nicely writtin, and had a great flow. good job. but in the second stanza the fisrt line seemsed almost to long for the rest of it and kinda messed up the flow. but it was still beautifly written.5/5 keep writting and thanks for the comment.

Aw, this poem is so sweet, it brought tears to my eyes. My ex-boyfriend tried something like that. But gave up. -.- It's just a great poem means so much.

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Meg

I hate that your poems always leave me breathless and wanting more.

Your ideas are fairly unique, I fear I am addicted now. =(

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The flow of this one superb....such beautiful words from the heart...great job...

Love Ann

Darien ,
This was a sad but yet beautiful poem ..
The flow was awesome and the words so heartfelt .
A poem so many can relate to I'm sure..

Awww what a romantic story! It flowed flawlessly and portrayed the story of so many men. Excellent write! Definitely worthy of a brag day thread!!! Awesome! :)

I really like this poem. It has a sense of loneliness that makes it seem even better.