by Minkus Aug 18, 2005
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A lie escapes the lips of grace, a single mind ensnared, |
by Shinobi
It was tiring to read this poem from start to end. The structure was just a mess. I suggest you revise it a bit, so it could be easily read. Again this seems more like a rap song more than a classic poem, not really my style. The words you used were most simple, and the rhymes were in an unknown structure, just being here and there. Can't say much beside try and revise it a little 3/5 |
I liked the word you used. very good! I really like it! 5/5!! all the way. I mean this was just an awsome poem! very well worded! great poem! |
Holy crap, I would give this poem 10/5 if I could. Geeze, it was just wow. The flow was gorgeous and the message was brilliant. You worded your poem with immense beauty and a powerful use of advances vocabulary. This poem, was it about cutting? That is my guess. Is this a poem about your past, or simply a topic you felt impressed to write about. This poem is very dear to be because of the life I have lived, and the life I live today. Brillant poem hun, a reall great job. |
by *Sherrie*
Real good work you are one talented boy...Keep up the great work. |
by Laura
OMG wow that was wow great poem....5/5 if i could put higher i would but cant...great job keep up the wonderful work....laura |