Heartless Fate (Nonet)

by Jacklyn   Aug 18, 2005


Gradually our life's meaning fades,
Forgetting our peace, love and faith,
A generation at risk,
Blooming in no respect,
Losing compassion,
Growing stubborn,
Heartless fate,
Leaving,
Hate.

~first attemtp at writing a nonet~

line 1 - 9 syllables
line 2 - 8 syllables
line 3 - 7 syllables
line 4 - 6 syllables
line 5 - 5 syllables
line 6 - 4 syllables
line 7 - 3 syllables
line 8 - 2 syllables
line 9 - 1 syllable

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  • 19 years ago

    by Steven Beesley

    Although the poem form does not allow a long poem, the message that the poem carried was very meaningful and more should read it.

    In my opinion you did a superb job!

    Warmest regards,

    Steve

  • 19 years ago

    by HOLLY ARMER

    I'm loving the message and the style is great. I have about ten pages of partial nonets that I've attempted. I either begin them great and can't end it or I have a great ending and no beginning, it's crazy!
    EOB said it all, I have no further suggestions! Take care~Holly

  • 19 years ago

    by EoB

    THe first thing I noticed was that the first line lacks one syllable, and that it says heatless instead of heartless in the seventh line...

    As for the poem, I like it...The message within it is well presented, and you manage to tell what you wish to tell in an interesting way...

    Despite it's nature as a nonet, it has a nice flow (i don`t usually like the flow within nonets), and the words fit well in...

    Every word contributes somehow, and nothing seems unecessary...

    good job

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