I've been through alot of stuff...i know what its like. amazing poem. comment on mine too, read a few. maybe you can relate

Hun im sorry u had to go through all that and im here for u and whenever u need to talk k. thank u for the comment and the poem was great i gave u a 5/5 ;) peace out

-faithfulserenity

Wow nice job love the folw of this one out this is one of you best so far that i have read keep up the good work 5.5

Wow..this was the best one so far...i loved it...another very different way to tell a story through poem...i wish i had your creativity! 5/5

Okay i swear to god you are amazing at story lines the ideas you have in your head are truly so wonderful the format in which you chose to write this was so interesting i really enjoyed reading this i did

I watch her suffer,
I watched her crash
Over a lost love,
Then go get smashed.

you lost rhyme scheme there again im sure i do this my fair share as good as the words sound they just dont rhyme

She wanted and yearned
Loved her more then you'd think
Her sorrow everynight
Causing her to drink.

the syllables here were off balance i though ruined the balance of things

I look from below,
And see up above.
The life of myself.
And some that I love.

did you mean *and someone I love* or is that how its supposed to go? if so i dont quite understand

other then those few minor things amazing...

Your writting is so beautiful,
i wish i was half the writter you are,
another worthy of 5/5

Been through that i have my own problems with alcohol,makes you think

Again excellent poem. its kinda how i used to be, i know how stupid i was for doing all of it and i will NEVER go back.
excellent poem. 5/5

The weed she smokes,
The things she snorts.
I watch her decay.
Her last resorts.

Loved that part..5/5

I liked the repitition of the "knowing" stanza, and I thought that the way you ended it by notifying the reader that it is a person (not yourself) that is the druggie and alcoholic makes this poem good. Although sad, this poem is as much a poem about friendship and love as it is about sadness and depression.

So sad, and so very inspirational. The poem says it all. There is nothing bad I can say about it. 5/5