Wow, brilliant poem there, I loved the style of writing, I found it really interesting to read, the poem is really good I enjoyed your descriptions near the end

"With tattered wings of brown,
With riven tarnished old clothes,
Straggly, gloomy, filthy black hair,"

And the way you ended the poem I thought was perfect, well done to you, good work, thank goodness for those little red numbers

Good and Unique style of writing! A little confusing and first but u did good explaining it. Please rate and comment my poems too. thanks!

*sighs* looks like I've got a lot to learn about poetry...I see so many ppl./kids here (all younger than me) writing in different styles and its impressive.

Amazing talent you have... if only some of it could rub off on me. lol :D

I miss your writing. Are you still away?
I'm back for a while but i'm off again soon for University so :'(
This is a wonderful piece. What marvellous description and heartfelt words.
"Perfection,
Is not,
Love,

Nor,
Is it,
Appearance."

- Perfecto.
Love yah heaps my special friend.
*Kalah.

Real creative. Wondering if you are Aquarius.