Hopes are high

by «-Pale-Petals-»   Aug 24, 2005


And my hopes are up high,
For something thats unlikely,
Racing around in doubt,
Trying to become visible.

and when I'm out,
and i see you at a party.
your always in the middle of it.
your very presence makes me
start to shrivel away.

cause the truth is
your just flat out amazing.
and i, i cant trace up.

Jealousy is murder,
And it runs through my veins.
seeps through my heart.
Suffocates my soul.

Seeing you talking,
to every fcuking person in the room...
And completely oblivious to the fact that I'm standing right there.

Why do i care so much,
When i know that i cant make you.
Your so fcuking special.
Something i wish i could be.

So i continue to coast on.
To whatever pathetic hope thats left.
That one day, maybe.. you\'ll actually see me again.

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  • 19 years ago

    by Krete

    Oh Bogger ....

    Now I have to vote on the school computer, my home computer, and my work computer to suffice for the 5/5's ... lol ... blessings

    *I will catch up on comments of the other poems soon...take care.

  • 19 years ago

    by Krete

    *Forgive me I don't usually comment twice ... but my full comment did not post.

    What I went on to say is:

    I think this is a sweet piece; It's sweet because you gave a fellow tribute who didnt deserve it.

    *Those we notice - the centers, the middle of a temporary universe, they dont deserve our praise; that is because ... your praise by comparison to their reality of him - it is an embellishment.

    ... that is to say - your poem is far more than the fellow will become.

    ;)

    5/5

  • 19 years ago

    by Krete

    *Forgive me I don't usually comment twice ... but my full comment did not post.

    What I went on to say is:

    I think this is a sweet piece; It's sweet because you gave a fellow tribute who didnt deserve it.

    *Those we notice - the centers, the middle of a temporary universe, they dont deserve our praise; that is because ... your praise by comparison to their reality of him - it is an embellishment.

    ... that is to say - your poem is far more than the fellow will become.

    ;)

    5/5

  • 19 years ago

    by Krete

    Man the third stanza is so perfect. I love the melliosmatic stream/puddlish like flow of this piece.

    Like I said the third stanza;

    "cause the truth is
    your just flat out amazing.
    and i, i cant trace up."

    And I quote again -'i cant trace up.'

  • 19 years ago

    by EpithetPoet

    Let him be samz... it just wasnt meant to be. You'll find someone who will appreciate you. I guarantee it.
    -A

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