Wow...that is really interesting...the perspective you took...I don't like it as much as the other new ones, but still well done.

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This poem gave me a feel of "Judith" by a perfect circle, and one line reminded me of a korn song,..

I'm feeling tired.
Your time, is gone today.
You flew with suicide.
Sometimes, that's OK

i wonder if you listen to these, and were possibly influenced by them, maybe subconsciously? no matter the case,.. i like this th0.. im lookin forward to more,..

Haha I honestly didn't realize that. perfect cirlce I rarely listen to but koRn is my favorite band. hm...thanks for noticing that I will change it soon.

Just fixed it:)

O, see when i said that i didnt think u needed to change it,.. i was just wondering if that might have been the influence,.. i believe there is a line of where ur stealing soemone elses content and where ur not, and i dont eblieve you crossed it.. again.. good job