by Lydie Aug 26, 2005
category :
Nature, environment /
nature
It's the soft wind against my hair |
by Lu
You painted a beautiful picture in my mind .. |
by Andrea
Wow, this is something i dont read everyday. good work. i liked the choice of words you used. the rhyming was soft and settle and you didnt force anything. good job |
by Emma
I like this one. not uselly what i read but it was written well? |
The third segment seems too short, maybe adding words to the lines to even it out. |
by Drew Gold
Good read,.. its always good to capture the beauty of the ordinary, in an extraordinary way, which u did very well with this piece.. to some it's just a walk in the park,.. but to you its something beautiful u chose to spend ur time writing about.. i like this.. it reminds us to look for the beauty and happiness in life on our own; that u just have to take a little time to see it.. loved the way u caught this piece.. images were great.. 5/5.. pZ |