Brillant poem! i love the imagery you've used, and you play on all the senses. keep it up

Good work. I liked the calming nature descriptions you used, it really gave the poem a smooth flow when reading. My favourite lines with exceptional imagery where “photographic memories,” “The soft crunch along the stones” and “the footsteps in a perfect pace.”
However, with a few descriptions it seemed you where telling rather than showing, maybe that’s something to think about. Also, the last stanza seemed to end the poem a bit suddenly, and it seems there could be more said to finalise the ending.
Overall a good poem. Keep writing.

Good work. I liked the calming nature descriptions you used, it really gave the poem a smooth flow when reading. My favourite lines with exceptional imagery where “photographic memories,” “The soft crunch along the stones” and “the footsteps in a perfect pace.”
However, with a few descriptions it seemed you where telling rather than showing, maybe that’s something to think about. Also, the last stanza seemed to end the poem a bit suddenly, and it seems there could be more said to finalise the ending.
Overall a good poem. Keep writing.

Sorry about the multiple comment, my computers knackered.

Really imaginative, descriptive poem, well done, I really liked the way you desctibed everything so beautifully, it painted many pictures in my mind whilst I was reading it, I could see myself in your postion, I loved the way you worded it and it flowed really well..

There was one part which I thought you could change though

"The soft crunch along the stones
my shadow along the ground
the wildlife around me
every sweet eccentric sound"

The last lines flow seems slightly disrupted, my suggestion would be to change it to

"The soft crunch along the stones
my shadow along the ground
the wildlife around me
each sweet eccentric sound"

To me that fits in with the poem better, it seems to keep its pace and gripping nature, this was an incredible poem so well done to you, keep up the good writing and take care of yourself, well done once again

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This is a great poem. I love the opening stanza, it set the tone very nicely. I also admire the vivid imagery, it really brought the poem to life as I read it. Well done~Holly

Good read,.. its always good to capture the beauty of the ordinary, in an extraordinary way, which u did very well with this piece.. to some it's just a walk in the park,.. but to you its something beautiful u chose to spend ur time writing about.. i like this.. it reminds us to look for the beauty and happiness in life on our own; that u just have to take a little time to see it.. loved the way u caught this piece.. images were great.. 5/5.. pZ

The third segment seems too short, maybe adding words to the lines to even it out.
the day-dreaming mode i'm in
I think it would sound better if you change mode to zone.
a burning sunset across the sky
that is beautiful!
i like your discriptions, it's really beautiful and i feel like i'm there. nice job, 5/5
-formerly Feline Fatigue

I like this one. not uselly what i read but it was written well?

Emma

Wow, this is something i dont read everyday. good work. i liked the choice of words you used. the rhyming was soft and settle and you didnt force anything. good job

You painted a beautiful picture in my mind ..
Your choice of words captivated my imagination and held it ..

A very beautiful topic to write about ...
One that we often don't take the time to notice ... But really should..
Beautiful job ...