All my love inside

The last line didn't go to well with it. but it was full of emotion. I just wanted to make a comment on ur format, um..idk how to explain this very well. but lets try it like this..u know how when u read poetry? there are natural pauses? well, maybe, u should try to start a new line at every pause u hear, that way it can flow easier, and ur rymes are more obvious, and not schrunched together. like this for example:

search for love, expel your disbelief
let me cast away all of your grief

to

search for love,
expel your disbelief
let me cast away
all of your grief

also try doing that at punctuation. This will help exaggerate the pause a little more, helping ur readers to have a flowing read. but the poem was beautiful.

Aww thats so sweet

I read it twice...and you've written such lovely words...the rhyming and all is there, and so is the "heart." When you meet "the one," she better appreciate all she has...she's going to be blessed... If you can't tell, I love this poem.

I hate to see people close up or give up because of the pain they've felt in the past...true love is out there...patience is one thing needed...and fear needs to be overcome...and lala la lala...I need some sleep...

xxx

Awww, this one is brilliant! i love the rhyming and the words, one of the sweetest poems u've written. U write fantastic sad/dark poems, but ur love ones r so amazing too...u said i was the fav poet on this site but i was gonna say the same thing to u! (u beat me there lol;) thx for ur nice comments on mine, xkeep ing touchx