by ben Aug 26, 2005
category :
Dark, fantasy /
dark, horror
There comes her all streaked with death and black she thinks shes depressed she think shes the worst but i know im much worst i make my wounds i stab my wounds again and again blood dripping on the floor its like a daily chore and every day i just want more and more i love the gore it happened today i saw death looked him in the eye and then he was gone i sreamed and cryed for him to come back so i got the knife and cut again until i saw my bone and it made me moan and i fell and she came in and saw me on the floor and she tore the knife from me and there we both lay dead. |
Hm, that poem was good. But it needs punctuation. It sort of had a story line, which i really like. Although the person that wants to meet death, should think about it more carefully. You'll leave cherished thing behind, and the ones you love as well. |
by Ebony
That poem kind of scared me but it's really good |
by Gedi
Pretty good, although you should definetly consider adding in the necessary comas and periods. |