Puddle of Tears (Double Ethree)

by Amanda Bee   Aug 27, 2005


So
Here I
Lie in my
Puddle of tears
Wishing you were here
To wipe away these fears
With my head upon your lap
With your hand stroking me on my back
With things back to the way they used to be

When you’d comfort me in your arms and say
Not to fret ‘cause things would be okay
How’d you always know that they would?
As you’d kiss me on my head
Each time there to save me
From sinking in sobs
But without you
Mom, surely
I will
Drown

* The poetry form, Etheree, consists of 10 lines of 1, 2, 3, 4, 5, 6, 7, 8, 9, 10 syllables. Etheree can also be reversed and written 10, 9, 8, 7, 6, 5, 4, 3, 2, 1. Get creative and write an Etheree with
more than one verse, but follow suit with an inverted syllable count.
Reversed Etheree: 10, 9, 8, 7, 6, 5, 4, 3, 2, 1
Double Etheree: 1, 2, 3, 4, 5, 6, 7, 8, 9, 10, 10, 9, 8, 7, 5, 4, 3, 2,

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  • 16 years ago

    by Tom Swart

    It is obvious that your words provide the nutrients for a poets pen like the sky provides the blue for the clouds. . I enjoyed your poem and the thoughts that came to visit the page before me. Keep up the good writes I look forward to reading more of your works. Peace.

  • 18 years ago

    by Michelle

    Excellent poem. great!!! 5/5! wonderful!

  • 18 years ago

    by Void

    Hey, thanks for the explanation. lol I see people put 'double etheree' and stuff into their titles and I never actually knew what it was *blush* I'm still a learner hehe. Anyway, I really like that all your work is unique and that you always try different ones out. You've taught me so much ina matter of 2 poems and I plan on challenging myself to do one of these sometime. Thanks for everything. Keep writing, you're a really talented writer! (And welcome to my favourites)

  • 18 years ago

    by Little Dot

    Great job with this poem. It's great to hear how people still need their parents to be there for them.

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