by RObC Aug 28, 2005
category :
Miscellaneous /
Misc. poems
Don’t be sad smile and laugh your worries away cause today is a new day no way I can stand by and let it go so much more to give. |
by Gracie Jo
I must agree with Blush, it was hard to read. Anyway, it was good. Take care & keep writing. :) |
"What is that I am missing and can it be fixed or is it just meant that I am to be alone in this world?" |
Phew. That sure is something. Again, I suggest separating it, probably short lines, and stanzas would be nice as well. Really good work just could use some organizing. I know for some poets…it comes out of their minds rapidly without taking pauses…so I think it’d be a good idea to go back after you get it all out of you…make sense? If you work on it, let me know… |