Honestly I don't think it needs anything else.....I think its perfect the way it is. I really like it alot, its great. I gave it a 5/5, its a great poem and keep up the great work. I could really visulize the whole thing and thats what the reader need to do.....ofcourse I don't do that sometimes lol. But its a awsome poem so keep it up.

Love,
Kala

To poem is brilliant, it really doesn't need anything else in it, it might even ruin it a little if you change anything else, so leave it as it is, your a great poet.

xx-HeavenzEyez-xx

This is really i great poem. I love the way it souns when you say it out loud. All the words click. I loved your first stanza. It really got me hooked and i read it to the end and then again out loud. Don't change a thing. it perfect, excellent.

ஜAmyஜ

You should think about getting rid of that comment ending. your poem is brillant and don't worry about changing anything.
that is unless you want alot of comments. in that case keep up the good work

Sam Mayo