Great use of words, perfect descriptions..... However the only thing i would suffest is that you use capitals with each line which makes it a bit harder to read.....

Good poem... Perfect ending!

-Lyd

Absolutey great..5/5 thanks for the comment ..i know that im not all that great ..but i love your work..maybe if you could give me some tips that would be awseome...but anyways awesome poem

This was great. i loved the way it flowed, and Im just in love with the way you write. its so personal and you already have a beautiful style set in stone. I just love it, and the wa you use rhyme in such a different way, not using the normal boring rhyme that is sued by all. Very very well done.