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What an incredible picture you paint with your words. Your talent is obviously great. The imagery is brilliant throughout the entire poem. Excellent!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!

I thought that was lovely, it was sad but well written. loved it
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This took my breath away! great!

Wow, another person to add to my favorites. Thanks for writing such wonderful poetry.

I really enjoyed this poem. I thought the wording you used suited the style of the poem and you went into so much detail even with several reads, not all is revealed. I think over all is was a touchingly sad poem, It gave the feeling of isolation or loneliness and feelings of desperation.
I really liked the final line “Alice in wonderland without the Cheshire cats smiles.” The reference to Alice in Wonderland puts a sense of naivety into the poem, and without Cheshire cats, the fairytale is lost.

Personally, I wasn’t too keen of the line format with the third line being much shorter than the other three. It seems to me to interrupt the flow, and give the impression something is missing from that line. But maybe that was intential, I don't know...

Overall a well written and detailed write. Keep up the good work!

Ps Thanks for your feedback on my poem “Autumn Breeze.” The reason the lines are set out in that way was deliberate. I actually jaggered the lines in the original poem so they more or less flowed into one another. However, this site doesn’t work in that way and subsequently when submitted the lines were all placed directly underneath one another. That’s the problem with making pretty patterns in your work, but they were there for a reason that’s the irritating part.