The Injustice

by juss an allycat   Aug 29, 2005


You see it in the newspapers
You hear it on the 6 o'clock news
Poverty, cruelty, starvation
Tragedy, death, abuse

People have gone many days
Without a drop of water
Without even a spoon of food
Fathers, mothers, sons, daughters

Right now she is crying
From her father she has just been beat
Her mother has been yelling at her
Tonight, she cannot sleep

He's been cutting himself often
The butcher knives, he possess
He's lived through years of torment
He knows the torture will progress

Though most of us cannot see it
Across the world, people are crying
Hopefully you all know it
Every minute people are dying

They live in the country of Israel
Many families are all jews
They're being forced from their homes
Like a repeat of World WarII

Her children are crying and hungry
But her family cannot afford food
It kills her to see them hurting
She knows soon, their lives will conclude

His feet are tied together, tight
As he works off his family's debts
He's been sitting, it's been 12hours
There is hunger, he continues to sweat

They are dreading going to school
Those children are just too scared
To face those bullies once again
Who fill their little lives with fear

Theres alot of injustice in the world
Theres not too much kids can do
So everyday, let your loved ones know
Just how much they mean to you

It will not feed a family
It may not save a life
But somewhere in our unfair world
It will make someone smile
That on its own is worthwhile

Copyright©2005 by Alysse
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  • 19 years ago

    by Feline Fatigue

    Much better, but another small suggestion.
    He knows the torture can still progress
    'can', i think would flow better as 'will', but if you want the same meaning, try 'may'. and 'still' is a stand still word in this case. it has no purpose. if you get rid of 'still' the lines would also even out better.
    'However all of us do know it'
    just a guess, but do you mean 'don't' know it?
    'He's been sitting, without moving for 12hours'
    you might want to somehow shorten that.
    i like this poem a lot. it has extreme truth to it and it is well written considering the ideas and the complexity of the topic. well done.

  • 19 years ago

    by Feline Fatigue

    He's been cutting himself often
    From the butcher knives he finds
    People have been making his life hell
    To just cut a vein, will leave behind his life
    this segment needs work. try playing around with the words and use a thesaurous to find words that would ryme better.
    the fifth segment is very good, and clever to use jew and world war II to ryme.
    i love this, it is spectacular! the last segment is great, but you have one too many lines and it throws off your 'flow' if you will. very good, 4/5.
    i bet you'll win that contest! let me know what happens.
    -formerly Feline Fatigue

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