WoW i really like this one..really deep..5/5

My one and only son.. something tells me that you dont literally mean this.. lol.. in any case.. good read through out.. you have a good sense of rhythm and you write pretty well.. id like to see more of your writing but in different styles, formats.. more metaphors, symbols,.. etc.. the stuff that really makes poetry so deep... push the envelope and extend ur possibilities... this line seems weird.. i dont usually refer to myself as ever "seeing someones face STANDING there" although i do recognize why u worded it so.. maybe change standing to swaying.. thats a good visual,.. coupled with the clouds it could almost be perceived as swaying with the winds.. just a thought .. good read... pZ

I can feel a lot of emotion in it...and I'm sure there are people who can relate (sadly)...reminds me of something a friend of someone I know went through...anyway, good work.

"I just wish I could have helped,
But I can't dwell on what's been done.
Never will I forget you.
My one and only son!"

Also, I like the positive message at the end...there's no point in dwelling on it...can't change what happened...people who go through things as this should realize it's not their fault, they would have helped if they could have...but it's over and they have to move on...

Take care
xxx

Oh that was good!!! i'm sorry things are going bad for you :( i know how it feels! this poem was awesome! the flow, the emotion, fit perfectly. 5/5

Whoa! Great one! Love lots!!