This is so true, I hate smoking!
Well done! you got your point across!!
Ewww smoking O_O

Welld one xx

The imagery is perfect; the way in which you make the reader think about what is happening through symbolism is breathtaking. I’m with apathetic on this one 6/5 a greater than excellent write from a greater than excellent writer.

I didn't quite get the deep meaning that you were trying to put across, but the imagery that I did get was fresh, but had a tinge of bitter.

Good Writing!
beth

Very vivid and and imaginative write. Well done!

Warmest regards,

Steve

Wow, this is unlike anything I've read on this site! It's intriguing and the imagery is astounding! Awesome stuff, keep it up~Holly

Well done

I think this is very good, veryy different too it was interesing

lots of love
*~*Becky*~*

Wow...Wow. That could be an anti-tabaco campaign ad. 5+

Refreshing and creative.

Awesome poem, I found this really original and creative. I like the tone you write with, like you are observing and distanced from the person. Nice job. :)

Very nice! It's a beautifully written poem. The last line was perfect. I loved the imagery in the poem as a whole, but the last line really finished it off for me. Superb.

-Jordan

Very great peice. You used excellent imagry. Keep it up!! 5/5

`Taleee xx

It's a good poem.

I don't even know what sort of message this is trying to convey. I thought I did until the last line. It seemed quite anti-smoking until then.

I liked reading that. Great imagery.

Omg , thats amazing!!
take care

-sam

Very nice poem. I really like it.

That was so amazing, extreamly awesome imagery...very awesome work.

This is a good poem well done strong

It was....pretty good! not the best...but ok. it didnt really catch me but thats just me. and by saying that i dont like it, im not saying that i could do better...though i might be able to...?