BRAVO!!!! This is most definatly the best you've written.

I was absolutely blown away by this. Greatly exceeds any of your other work, or anything else I've seen on this site. Put simply, kick f'n ass. It was much more self-supporting than some of your others, which were great but depressing...this though....hot DAMN!!!!!!!!! Great job ash.

Its a great poem

keep up the hard work

Jacs
xxx

Very good poem! I liked it! Its good to know your strong! keep writting i love your work!!

Muah

So broke and torn in two.
might wanna reword that
Showing them I am the one who is strong
this line is fine, but its location reuins the structure you have.
the flow wasn't perfect because you changed the location of the ryme every segment.
I like how good your self esteem is in this, great job, 4/5

I love it it is great iit is perfect to be published you are a gifted poet great job it is great

U kick ass, keep up the good work, besides, publish it, u deserve the recognition.

Wow that was excellent, it is definately worth a spot in other people's eyes. Very inspirational and perfect in everyway. My friend good luck.

Sorcerous Of Fire, you need to shut up. Nobody really cares if she misspells something or anything, the mechanics don't change the message or power of the poem, so I really don't see the importance. I know you're going to get vindictive and give me some bad reviews, but whatever! It's bullcrap to give somebody a low rating for something like that.

Heyhey! wow great poem! i really luved it! very inspriational! And flowed nicely! great write! keep up da awesome work! 5/5
~Luvz~
~Chica~

Great job. I think it's perfect the way it is, don't worry about changing anything. Wonderful poem andd great emotion. Keep it up!

I don't think you should change anything. I would say 5th stanza is by far my fav. But its all amazing. 5/5 no doubt. Keep writing and take care (always))xx:

*> : PainOfOne

WOA!!!! AMAZING ONE ASH!!!!!!!!!!!! WOW! THIS WAS AMAZING!!! 5.5!!!!!!! I'M IMPRESSED, YOU HAVE BEEN GETTING BETTER WITH RHYMES!!! 5.5 KEEP IT UP! AMAZING WRITTE!

Marielys

1. Overall – This poem has a great message. I think that it is great that you stay strong, especially when so many other fail to do so. Like I said before, it has a GREAT message.

2. Title – I think the title fits perfectly. It is nice and simple yet very eye catching.

3. Rhyme Scheme/rhythm – I noticed that this poem dosent rhyme, but that is perfectly alright. A lot of the best poems out there dont rhyme, so no worries on that. Also, You could lose or gain a few syllables here and there, but other than that the flow is awsome! You have a very unique writing style. I think it is great. The poem sounds awsome even without a defined rhyme scheme. Great job!

4. Errors (typos, spelling, grammar, etc) – There were b=none that I could see. Great job! (I assume you proofread???)

5. Content – I think that the last line on the second stanza may need a couple more syllables. My suggestion is to change it to something along the lines of "Often broken and torn in two"

Closing Comments: All I can say is GREAT WORK! You have an awsome talent! This poem is extremely well written. I hope you keep writing. You're really good at it. I also wanted to thank you for the comments on my poem. I really appriciate it. Thank you.

Wow very good poem... I voted a 5.. it would mean a lot if you checked out my poem "Endless Love" thanks and keep it up! hugs

"Wounderful"...?

Thats a great poem, really well written ..thanks for the comment ..and keep up the work, this poem..is one of the best poems ive ever read!!!

I really liked this poem! well done...
my only critisizm (if you could call it that!) would be that it didnt flow that well... but keep working on it! well done! it's still a great poem!!
take care, xoxoxo

A consistent rhythm would make this better in my opinion, but it is still a good poem. Well thought out wording.

Love so wonderful,
Yet leaves many of us so blue,
So broke and torn in two

The last line seems slightly too short.

Well worth the read though

Very nice . You show much strongness in being able to forgive those who wrong you .I only wish there where more people in the world like you . Great expression !