Suggestion for this line: "no one wans to hear of all the tears and lies no one wants to know any of the hows and whys"

no one wan[t]s to hear
of all the tears and [all the]lies
[and]no one wants to know
any of the hows and [the]whys

This evens out your rhythm and makes it sound better (also fixed your spelling).

Anyway, overall it was a really nice poem. Just keep working on it.

Hey that peom was really good. It flowed really nicely. I do agree with the first comment. It would even out your rhythem and it does sound better. But anyways that is sort of what people do because I felt it. Great Job!

Crystal, I loved this poem so much. It might just be how I felt at the particular moment in time, but still. I miss you so much.

Ur a great poet never stop writing

I know exactly what you're talking about in this poem. I hid all my tears for so so long until I finally realise everyone else is hiding their own as well. I realised it wasnt worth to keep it all bottled up. Anyways, awsome write! I love the message. It is so true. Your poem flows so well. I LOVED it! 5/5!

Good poem. Different way of getting your point across. Small thing:
they don't see what their doing
their- they're
Well written.

I liked your content, I truly did. It might do well with a little cleaning up here and there, but your base idea is great.

Great poem with realism! Appreciate the thought behind the lines and the title. Reminds me of a sad loss 1 year ago. Anyway, will look through all your work!

I really like the symbolism and imagry

Wow! dark, but real, real good!

Again, I like how it's short and simple and goes right to the pont.

My favourite lines were:

"
The dark side of the moon
is where the worlds fears are hidden
no one wants to think of it
and talk of its forbidden

no one wants to hear
of all the tears and all the lies
and no one wants to know
any of the hows and the whys"

( )_( )
(='.'=)
(")-(") Arrivederci!

Wow...ur 16? That was beautifully deep. Your ideas are profound. I do think you could come up with more creative word usage but other than that...it was superb. Because of its depth I had to give it a 5/5

Nice poem flowed very good 5/5

The ending line didn't seem to fit very well. You're word usage could have been a touch better but still it was a nice write. Interesting title. As I said it was a nice write.
~A&C

I really like this poem.