by PS
This is really intense. i love the end. i wasnt expecting that. nice job. |
by sarah
This is emotional, def 1 of your best keep writing and take care sarah x |
by Adriana
I like this poem a lot..it shows that you have a heart..nice job...it is also very sad... |
by Sole
So sad - Great poem - short, but really hits home with the power of the last few lines. Well written. |
by amelia
Awesome write... touching |
by Ariana
This is a really sad poem. I liked how you kept it short and compact yet still had alot to say. The rhyming was mostly good though I thought the last couple of lines sounded a bit forced, maybe using the same rhyme but changing the context would work? I liked the rhythm in this and how every line flowed onto the next nicely. The title is also quite creative. My fav line would be 'what once was blue turned a violent red.' because it's quite a graphic description but is stated as if it is perfectly natural and I like the contrasts of it. Congrats for the special award in the poetry contest :) |
Aww how sad:( congrats on gettin 2nd in that 1 gurls contest i took over. this is so good 5/5 |
Wow. |