by lindy Sep 1, 2005
category :
Nature, environment /
nature
Sunset. The slashing of water against morning grey rocks. Rippled white dust being blown like a giant hand scooping salt. The rainbow sky against turtle green water. There is mist against the sun that looks like the heavens. It makes you feel like there is no world around you. You, the water, the sunset, the sand are all one. |
Beautifully written poem, I read it twice. |
by joey
Wow...great poem the word choice is amazing u vividly described the experience i felt as though i was right there on the island i also like how u started each stanza with one word...the only thing was the end was shorter with les description, but i liked that contrast to the rest of the poem...def 5/5 |
Nature's not really my thing.. But this is good! Well done, Nice Writing |