Unrequited For Now

by undying blusher   Sep 2, 2005


One day that fateful time will come
He will have his true love in his arms
(which have been empty for much too long)
No longer will he be the lonely, unrequited one
His love, his compassion will finally be returned
For the first time
The unrequited one will be without his "un"

She, his true love to be, will be the one to treat him right
She will gladly return every single hug, every adoring glance, every ounce of love she can manage to give
The unrequited will at last be requited of his faithful love
All the pain he calls his past will actually feel worth it

One day this will be true
He will have proven himself,
his longstanding predictions, to be wrong
This man will not be the one to die alone
And something else will be put on his gravestone
His coffin will remain empty for a much longer time than he had once hoped
Thank goodness he did not listen to the voices in his head
And refused to give up once and for all

He will learn to look past the surface of things
To fear not the future nor the possibilities
of gaining or deepening his wounds
That no matter how badly his heart is torn
It can always be sewn and restored
At times it just takes longer to heal
Does not mean it never will
One day, my friend, one day
Life will truly be worth living

*suggests reading the poem which first inspired this: http://www.poems-and-quotes.com/sad/poems.php?id=470920 - this poet has some incredible work...check out some of his other pieces*

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  • 19 years ago

    by Red Tears Of The Soul

    Its been awhile hasn't it blush? Ah well, This one is really something, its great how you put in hope as a theme. Anyway, its a great poem (no surprise there), see ya later. ^_^x

  • 19 years ago

    by keep n touch

    Good write, enjoyable and it's awesome that you wrote a poem for him

  • 19 years ago

    by *~CaSsYa~*

    =) great job I love this one~ yes, someday I'm sure he'll be unrequited... without the "UN" lol

  • 19 years ago

    by Drew Gold

    Good read,.. the first stanza is a fairly decent beginning, and it seems u dont keep the quality up from there on out..

    (which have been empty for much too long)..

    liked that line..

    The unrequited one will be without his "un"

    good concept, yet even as it flows and rhymes, it seems a bit awkward to me.. oh well, i cant think of a better way to put it. the next stanza has the lines

    The unrequited will at last be requited of his faithful love

    and thats pretty redundant,.. you're saying the same thing in two different ways. in this example, to me, it's quite unneeded. the variances in the way you say it aren't really all that grand, so, it seems like a waste of space.. overall good piece,.. i liked the un- idea... its always fun to play with words like that. keep doing that but in different ways of course.. the form was lacking, but a lot of my poems lack structure as well. u just gotta know how to work with your words to make it flow and sound right.. did a good job with that.. 4/5.. pZ out

  • 19 years ago

    by Jamie

    I love this poem it is so SWEET!!

    **Thanks for the comments**

    *~Jamie~*