Good stuff man. Yea it seems difficult to actually get people to READ your poems, I've commented on a lot of other people's but they haven't reciprocated. So basically I have no advice for you.

Airight then well pffffffffffff hmmm well I dont have internet any more any way lol

Oh i loved this one, loved this part:
"Come take my
hand and we can
run off tighter to
a happy place in
make believe land"

pili :)

Very good poem. I thoroughly enjoyed reading it. :) Keep writing & take care.