by misty Sep 6, 2005
category :
Love, romance /
i love you
To say that you had rescued me is slightly overstated |
I absolutely love this!This is a wonderful piece.Technically the repeating stanza re-enforces the flow and emotional impact, and that's where it's strongest-the emotional impact.I was quite moved by this piece.You may want to ease up on slang spelling, no offense but Prince pretty much did that too death twenty years ago and I see so many others on this site who use that same style.Sometimes it does work though, but most small pres editors shy away from it.But that's only a minor point and it's just my opinion.But you have a strong voice and something to say that others can so relate to.Really impressive poem, with so much emotion it's overwhelming.I hope to see more of your work in the future.Take care/peace out. |
by Mithun
Nice .... |