Wow. very deep and emotional.

Hehe that was meant to be the effect
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Jamie, I do not know why you get such low ratings! This was great. What can I say? The rhyming is precise and accurate (though a more rigid structure would be great). Perhaps the metre is dodgy at times, which makes the poem flawed, but still, such minor details do not account for such low votes. It fulfils its purpose of shocking the reader, perhaps more symbolism and grotesque diction might help. I really don't know what else to say. You are truly great. Keep it up!

I thought it was pretty good myself it had a good rythm and it was not unlike most poems that are about the same thing its good to be creative.

Holy Sh**!! I dunno who in their right f ign mind would have gave that poem a frickin 2??? Losers! They probably didn't understand it, so hey what you don't understand youdiss....I myself love this poem...Jamie this I feel is by far the BEST poem you've ever written...It was amazing....Every stanza pure metaphors...I'm sure everyone interpretted this in their own unique ways...I'm definately printing this off and It's going in my fave poems book of all time...Not to sound wierd but you should IM me with your last name so I can put it next to it...Just incase later on ya know...lol...You're hella talented....And I don't even think you know it...
10/5...
Great Job Jamie
Thanks
Ash

Holy Sh**!! I dunno who in their right f ign mind would have gave that poem a frickin 2??? Losers! They probably didn't understand it, so hey what you don't understand youdiss....I myself love this poem...Jamie this I feel is by far the BEST poem you've ever written...It was amazing....Every stanza pure metaphors...I'm sure everyone interpretted this in their own unique ways...I'm definately printing this off and It's going in my fave poems book of all time...Not to sound wierd but you should IM me with your last name so I can put it next to it...Just incase later on ya know...lol...You're hella talented....And I don't even think you know it...
10/5...
Great Job Jamie
Thanks
Ash