Can relate to this poem so much...But remeber ! No one can make you feel insuperiour without your concent!

I really loved your poem...its as if im the one that wrote it...cause thats all the things i feel in one...keep up the good work

Your writing style is similar to mine apart from the content and you will find that writing in rhyme and rythm and keeping it consistent is not easy ...
A very well written poem and you can only get better
Lets see more

Hun, dont ever give up on hope. Its what keep us alive. =]

I loved this part: "Now I am sad
No longer proud
I wish I wasnt me
Just blending into the crowd" and beleive it or not I wouldnt change a thing in this one, great job thats a 5/5

Good flow to this and good rhyming. keep it up and good job once again!

1. I felt that the repititious use of "I" throughout the poem was not as effective as it might have been intended to be. It seemed slightly tiresome by the end of the second stanza.

2. The poem seems to just fade away at the end. It doesn't seem like much of a conclusion, and so another, more definitive stanza can be added.

3. I suppose the contrast between then and now is effective, but I think you could still make that contrast without being blatant about it.

This was a good poem, but there are many things you could do to improve it.

Hey man, that was a awesome poem... can relate to it alot... Keep writing!!! luv yaz! *liz*

Again, you need to shorten some sentences because it kinda threw off the whole poem. Your wordings is wonderful though and the topic isn't so bad.

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