Dosn't even matter

Not your best, sorry, but I am in love with the fourth paragraph...just wow.

Sheena

Bad feeling, but good writing..

"Im so numb anyhow"

anyhow doesnt seem to fit, in my opinion.. although i cant see it fitting anywhere; i guess its just my opinion..

"Or pretend me you never knew"

this is confusing and seems forced,.. maybe a typo or just an idea that came out construed,.. i dunn0.. "pretend like you never knew me" might have been the intended message, but then it wouldnt fit the rhyme scheme.. i dont think you should bend your work like this,.. i know i do it myself at times, but if the idea doesnt fit the rhyme scheme, rewrite it in a totally different way that doesnt seem so forced.. just my thoughts.. good job on the whole th0.. pZ out

No that's not mean thats perfectly okay i agree with you it is rather a boring poem but it is almost perfect way of wording my feelings at the time...painful to me...boring to others....thanks for the honesty really

Yeah what happened was....i wrote the poem and then a few days later opened it wrote one last stanza without reading through the poem so i had forgotten about the rhyme scheme cause im normally not into abab more abcb but i did notice that but i was too lazy to change it and i liked the way the last stanza rung lol but thanks!! i know it was kinda a throw off hehe

3rd line 4th stanza...seems kinda forced...and there were at least 2 other spots also....but only slightly...5/5