I would say it is in the right category, It was indeed a very good poem, I liked the decapitated part, I couldnt read it at first.. The ideas and story which was told I think was quite unique in its own way, the format and style you used worked reasonably well, however I kept getting thrown off by the half finished sentences, some of them it added mystery but some frustrated me slightly as they broke my concentration

"I'm greeted by the chilly autumn breeze as
it lays a kiss on my sodden cheek,
in return."

For some reason these lines I believe may have worked better if they were just two lines as it threw me off at the ending, In general, I like the idea of having the pauses as I thought, as i said, it added mystery to the poem, just on the last lines I think it could be better as
"I'm greeted by the chilly autumn breeze as
it lays a kiss on my sodden cheek, in return" just as two lines..

However, the effect, may have been what you wished for..

Apart from that, this poem was wonderful, I felt gripped from the first line and enjoyed each twist in the story, well done to you..

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Wow.... EXCELLENT poem. The best one I've read in a long time. It's deep and powerful, without over-doing any of the several emotions that are awakened when reading this poem. I'm really at a loss for words. I'd like to point out several lines that stood out to me: 1-7, and how you stretched out the word Decapitated. Wow.... I'm so impressed. You should most definitely put it in your features.
You're officially on my list of favorites.
-Kate

A 5, without question.

Intense imagery, a beautiful but sad ending. The repetition suited its purpose, you're style is unique and brings out the best in you're words. You have a magnificent imagination and can put metaphors so well together, its almost scary. You are truly one of the best authors to write such perfect words and they take the breath out of me.

It was a little hard to read, because of the format, but idk how it would work out, just like..try to start a new line at the pauses, and punctuation. It would help it flow a little better :) it was very emotional. and i liked it alot. I love how i could see what was going on in my head, and i could feel the emotions also. it was very good!

Thats really good 5/5

Silver, this poem is beautiful.

'In the silent observation of the night,
the breeze back combs my hair then chases
golden autumn leaves across the grass.'

Amazing imagery, i dont know what to say except: i loved this poem. and thankyou for putting it out there.

mwahh,
aylz

I enjoy the fact that the poem itself is decapitated by the word. Seems like a somber lot, but once again wonderfully rendered.

That was very unique i've never read a poem like that very good

I have read some of your poems, and I must admit you are incredibly talented. This poem was especially fascinating due to the structure. You "literally" decapitated your word! Anyways, as I walked today in the early morning, I wanted to write about the "lovely and gentle breeze of autumn" caressing me, and this is why this caught my attention. The poem is excellent, full of efficient imagery and great diction, such as "Laying limp and helpless on the grass.
The moonlight bounced off the bare trees
giving a ghostly look about the place...
I remember, and I know you do too.
So, here I am, again. I had that two... (et caetera)" Very well done indeed.
PS: As many commented in one of your other poems, you are truly beautiful.

I don't want to be an idiot and pretend to understand what it means...Then give you a detailed explanation that is completely wrong. lol. However I will say that the way I took it, it was very disturbing. Not in a bad way. But more sad and kind of detached.

This poem really made me think. In other words, it was quite intriguing. Which is one of the best qualities a poem can have in my mind.

Thank you for sharing.

Nice job girl i love the style of if keep ip the amazing work

I'm very sorry but I didn't quite get it, although there were a few very chilly points in it, like to give me goosebumps...

Good Writing!
beth

I liked the visualization. it was very good writing from an eyes point of view into the heart.

This poem was deep and flowed well.
well done

Jacs
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