Nah its heaps gud :) kep it up son make sure u read sum of mi poems 2 luv mwa buhbi

I quite like this poem. Its really nice. I love re-tellings of 'sotories' I find them quite artistic, and you've maneuvered that quite well. Good job. And thanks for the comment on my poem.

Awsome write, thanks so much for r/c on mine im adding u in my favs

Its a very sad poem im thinking this really happened

Hey this was amazing i absolutely loved it xxx take care

Hey- thanks 4 the comment on my peom it's much appreciated, i read ur poem 2 very very good, u shuld soo keep writing coz i luv reading different ppl's peom coz it just makes me feel that ppl do understand. ne way keep up 2 gud work
xoxo

Amazingly written
its really nice!!!
but is it a true story?? I mean, shes reli young for suicide
anyway keep up ur gr8 work
Much Lov
N3mA x0x0x0x0x