I like the style. It was very good but for some reason the very begining didn't catch my attention much. no biggie tohugh lol.
My fav lines were:
Watch it dance down my face,
Along with my transparent worries.

That ones a bit sad =( ... the bit about how nobody really cares how you are really captured my attention as today i wrote a similar thing on my msn space. asking how you are practically is just being polite...
but back to your poem, you have alot of talent...keep it up xx

Great expression! You dove into your inner feelings and expressed them into words which is so hard to do.

These days its so difficult because we focus on our own pain, making ourselves feel bad and everyone else is focusing on themselves. It seems when we reach out, it gets lost in this self-obsessed society but we're as bad as everyone else.

Again, a sad poem. If you want someone to reach out to you, find someone who is sad themselves and reach out to them.
Take care.
luv kt

Great job... you have a way of communicating what you want to say very well

keep it up, im looking forward to reading more

This part was awssssommmee!!!

"Cant you see these sad tears dancing in my eyes?" wow its a strong one!!!
5/5

U r one of the best poets that i ever read in this site, i really enjoy ur poems, 5/5