The story was a lil drawn out, and honestly,.. though you described it in your own fashion, it seemed a bit trite.. the length turned me off at first but i kept reading.. u kept a steady flow and decent rhythm,.. but it seemed your vocabulary was lacking and thus this seemed a bit dull.. i dont mean to offend, its just my opinion, which is worth nothing.. but its not bad,.. in my opinion, itd be better to shorten it and tell whats the most important details.. leaving out the extra stuff.. and then add a lil more imagery (memories maybe) to evoke feeling.. anyway not bad.. and the answers suicide.

No matter how much effect he had on her(your) life.. you still can live and get through it. he did not cause it, theoretically, he was a factor to the cause.

I'd have to say sucide and good poem! The flow was off in some spots and the rhyme seemed forced sometimes but otherwise great work! 4/5

Love
Haily

My bad 5/5....typo ;)

Wow love, that is so deep. No matter what, suicide is never the answer, no matter how hard it gets you have to use the help of the ones around you and keep pushing on. My counsellor did Cognitive Behaviour Therapy with me, and it was all about how nobody else is ever responsible for your actions or feeling, its how you chose to deal with it, so it would just be suicide. What he's done does play a part in it, but it's still your choice to end your life. If this guy is making you feel like this, then maybe you have to stop and think if he's really worth it. I know its hard, but there are always people who love you, and in times like this you really have to use that to your advantage and just stay strong. Good luck

Thsi is not murder, it is sucide!!!, you can't so this to your self. You have so much more of your life to live, don't give it up just for him. You'll find somebody else. It will take time but it's better than losing your self

Such a very sad and touching poem but yet it still would be ~suicide ~ . Even though it hurts to have your heart broken the only person responsible for taking your life would be yourself . If it was murder the prisons would be so full of people that broke hearts .
I hope your heart begins to mend for time heals all pain .Take care my dear for you have tugged on the strings of my heart with this one .

Wow..i dont even know what to say about that one besides its probally one of the best poems ive ever read..this poem reminds me of a bunch of my poems mixed together! lol but it was SO good 5/5 deffinately! I loved it! Stay strong.
Becky
xoxo

This was an amazing poem..i loved it.i think that its suicide because u are choosing to do that to urself..i personally think its not worth ur life..i know its hard when u care about someone so much. but so many other ppl care about you...great jobb!!!

This made me cry... really. I've been through something alot like this... but hang in there, life gets better. the most precious thing that you have is your life.... so dont throw it away. reach out and try to make some friends.... I promise it'll get better, I'm praying for you.

This really very well done. amazeing flow content and verse. but; now that i have read this very strong poem
and reading your own comment at the end I am sort of speachless I know the feelings your haveing and I know it seems like youll always feel like this.. but please please please dont think of doing what your whole poem was about. belive me things will get better I know times feel dark now but belive me when I say this times change they always do things will get better

I know how ur feeling, in fact, i'm going thru the same thing. I really think u should read my poem Hope...it would help you alot.

Neways, i think this would be more of murder, but if you ever need a friend, i'm going to be there for you! just send me a personal message, and i'll respond. i'm always willing to listen! anyways, this was amazing 5/5

This is suicide...I am very sorry you feel this way.
This poem was very touching! I know im young but I feel I can relate.
This poem spilled out your heat=rt all your feelings and was excellent!
The flow was excellent and I think this is your best poem! well done I really enjoyed reading this! it had a story to it and I was stuck from the begining to end! wow well done a complete master peice!

Please please read http://www.poems-and-quotes.com/sad/poems.php?id=417465

I dont care If you rate or comment just read it please thank you so much!

Lisa x)

And also I think that what happened in this poem should not have to happen in real life.
Use the poetry to express your self then show him how great you are and how much he is missing out on!
Self harm isnt worth it, hes not worth your blood if he could make you feel this way.

x

Pleas this is suicide not murder! nothing si so bad thatyou can get out of it. Your young you`ve still got years to live. A broken heart will mend with time and you will find someone else. I know how much it can hurt but it will get better soon you will see it doesent hurt so much. It`s a very good poem. I was very touched by it

This is such a beautyful poem. very well written. and it's such a sad story. but you'll make it through it. just stay strong!
crystal

Wow...terrific poem but I hope its not a cry for help...lol 5/5

This poem left me speechless... I'm not sure what it is.. But good job

Wow. i really like this poem keep up the great work.
Emma.5/5

It had a very dark flow, but Id still say that, technically, its suicide, but he was the one who broke her heart.

Good Writing!
beth