Wow amaing poem so deep and i can feel your hurt throu it. i am sorry this is happening to you and i hope you are strong enough to get past it. i believe you are and if he dont come around his lose you seem like a great person and you seem to care so much for him his stupied if he cant see that. i hope you make it through

This is sad, but you can do much better then him. If he feels you aren't important enough to call and talk to, then he's missing out on a great thing. But maybe he's just shy? Have you ever tried talking to him or calling him? Sometimes people think to much about things and make assumptions that aren't true. And I'm sure if he knew how you felt about him he would want to talk to you.

Take Care,
Renee

OMG! That was one of the greatest poems I've EVER read! I love it and you are a GREAT poet! That poem..... the same thing is going on now! If you need to talk E-mail me @ evilrotcduckie@yahoo.com. Keep up the great work! :)

Damn that was really really good...i liked it alot and thanx for comenting on my poem means alot to me...but again that was really good...

Very creative writing. I know how painful rejection can be...great poem

I am thoroughly impressed! I have no answer for you. Sorry. =(

My favourite lines are:

"She fell then to the floor
now nothing will be the same,
her last word was a whisper
I think she spelt his name."

And.

"He was the cause for her death
If he phoned her she wouldn't have died
now what would you call this ?
Murder or Suicide ?"

Especially the last two lines of that stanza.

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Wow, so dark and depressing and sad.... but I love it for it....

Wow...this is really good...and really i think it is sucide. It took me a while to think of that though. Even though he didnt wanna be her friend, she should have tried to talk to some one else. There are other people out there who care for her. And if you ever need to talk..im here for you...24/7...5/5 poem...~Rach~

WoW intense.. i loved it. its something people can relate to everyday.

Hey i luv this poem sooo much, especially this bit,

A single tear escaped her eye
followed by a million more
Her heart was so broken
her soul was hurting sore..

keep ritin

xXx

This is not murder neither is suicide...this is giving up in life...

Hey, i can relate to this poem...as if you are telling my story...except that it's only fifteen years between me and him...and i too thought of killing myself...but i won't do it...i won't and will never...cause his not worth it...if he do not care...fine...let him be...he don't know what he's losing...what a jerk...girl...you deserves someone better...you just has to wait for that someone to come...

Awesome job! It sounds familiar, I met have read this poem already. But still, good job

~you can still add more imagery

Dam grl.. its really good! dont give up on life! because you never know your life could get much much better!

Jeez kool poem dats sad though i rekon its suicide coz ur the one who chooses to kill your self just tell him how you feel its the same with my ex she wont talk to me but im trying to get over that :D 5/5

I love your poem. Very powerful. Also sad with lots of emotions.
*~Meg~*

Wow. This is my all time favorite poem in the world. It happens to alot. I'm going through it too!
Murder. He could have saved her. Hope this doesn't happen to you. Just think of how many people wouldb be hurt. But I know how you feel. Sometimes you think it would just knock everyone to their senses in a way?
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OMG.. this poem is so sad. I really like the lines
One day he heard of it,
her death reached his ear,
he'd just lost someone forever
who had held him so dear
Great write! keep it up ^_^

Anthony 5/5

I cut myself...very deep and watch the blood flow. It relieves my mind of thinking and makes me feel alive. This poem means to me Suicide. Simply for the fact that you would have taken your own life. He drove you to it but you did the actual cutting. I am not saying however that it was your fault...because I think it was both....I am a sister so please dont think i am juding you because I am not. I live by the knife an would die if it wasnt for it.
AWESOME WRITE.......DONNA

WOW, that is an amazing poem. In my opinion it would be murder. Is he denies you like that causing your slow downfall then he should be brought in. I am sorry you have to go though this.

Wow... this is an amazing poem. i think its both suicide AND murder. don't let some guy do this to you. take care, xoxoxo