Wow that was awsome. WOW!!! i dont really know why but i really loved this one. i wish i could write something that dosent rhyme. this was writen very well. keep up the awsome work......luv and huggs....missy

It's nice, but i think you should make the sentence short or try separating it,
It's makes people kind of lazy to read it when it's all join together. That's just what i thought.

Anyway, thanks for your comment on my poem. The title you suggest is nice, but i change it into Rhythm of my heart, thought it will be better since my heart beat is nothing special.

Whoa hey it's awesome!
i loved the last sentence:
"You looked deeper than I did and fully unfolded this poet's heart"
it's so beautiful and original.
u've r very talented.
take care.

adios!

pili.

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u're very talented****

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byebye ^^

Hey hun ur poem is realli great, u have real talent. keep up the good work

You keep describing my life......

"For if such a fear is accomplished I amend you for you know me better than I know myself. You looked deeper than I did and fully unfolded this poet's heart. "

Brilliant. A very effective & flowing story was explained throughout this piece. You have expressed concealed thoughts almost everyone has encountered; and you do this excellently. In order to improve, I would suggest structuring the poem into stanzas (it is far easier to understand when reading the first time round). Other than that, it was a beautiful write!
Very well done, David :)

God bless,
-Elysium.

P.S: Thank you very much for your latest comments, I really appreciate it! =].x