Great Idea for a fake as you call it

an intersting idea
it's a little hard to follow at times but so are some of my poems so *smiles* great job keep up the work!

Umm i didnt care to much for this poem. it was kinda like you where trying to tell two different stories at the same time...it was hard to follow and again the rhyming was scattered and not that good of a flow.

I agree with andrea about the two stories. I don't think the rhyming really matters much in this poem, but there is too many ideas.

Okay so yeah spilt personaltiy type poem which isnt a bad thing but can be confusing...

i start to write a poem about my life.
how about i wanted to be your wife.

i think you meant *about how* or if not you should change that

when i start to poor my feelings on this piece of paper.
*poor is pour*

your rhyming is so scattered darling as i said before you need to either rhyme or not dont go in the middle

I like it keep it up